What do you think about this poem?

I love it...very...descriptive...makes the reader think and very well written. I showed this to my mom (she is an 11th grade english teacher) and she said its very well written. Although she said for the final copy to make sure all your punctuation and capitals are correct, otherwise if you were to hand this in exactly as it is now a teacher may take quite a few marks off. But if this is just for fun :) then its absolutely AMAZING!